The Poet of Departure

As the World slowly crumbling on my feet
I'm starring at you with the last breath of my love
Fly... Fly.. Let me take flight out of your reach
Let me bathe in the sun stained world without your gaze

As the clouds slowly drifted apart, I take a look at you from the world far away
the feeling, the mind that I bear, and even the words that never spoken before
Turning into a sharp blade, which its edge will cut every connections that we shared together
The Chain between our hearts pierced, cursed, despised and broken in a miserable way

I take a glance of your silhouette
My wounds which carved by your thorns might still there
But with the shreds of my love that withered already
It's do Us apart.. Not by the death but by our Egos

Final Assignment of Writing II (The Small Colleges for Foreign Students)

Attending a small college has several advantages for foreign students, now I will tell you about those advantages. First, the tuition’s cost of small colleges will be cheaper  than the bigger colleges, the chances to get a scholarship will be bigger too since the competition is not as big as the big college, the other factor is that you can doing some part-time works while studying because small college permitted their students to have part-time jobs, and by attending small college you will need less outcome for your study because the expenses will be lower. Second, attending small college It could be more comfortable for foreign country’s students, why? Because the numbers of students will be lower so that the class or the campus itself won’t be so packed with people, it will be easier for foreign students to blend in and socialize because of the smaller number of students. It will help the students to build a closer relationship by physical and emotional approaches, there will be no extravagant events since the number of students is limited, and the professors (lecturers) can be more focus on their duties to teach rather than doing researches or such, the possibilities for students and professor collaboration will be opened too. However, another good part is that the professor will be always available whenever you want to consult your problems or when you want to have serious discussions. The third advantages is about the flexibilities of smaller colleges if we compare it to any big college, most of small colleges in Indonesia are more flexible about their systems, the system of the bureaucracy is clear and not too complicated even for foreign students. The schedule can be arranged while you can choose what programs (lessons) that you want to study and which you won’t, it will be easier to have make-up class or extra class by just having appointment with the certain professor. So from my personal point of view, the foreign student will gain several advantages by attending a small college. Those advantages are the cost of the tuition that  will be cheaper, the condition of the environment  they will study on will be more comfortable and of course the situation of the study will be more relaxed, and the system of the campus will be easier to understand and more flexible so that there will be no problem with the lessons or the bureaucracy.

Preferences:

http://www.usnews.com/education/blogs/professors-guide/2010/07/28/10-reasons-to-go-to-a-small-college

Final Assignment Writing II (Attending a small college has several advantages for foreign students)

By: I Gede Bhisma Griwanasta (1212021167/ 3B)
      Putu Yogi Agustia Pratama (1212021032/ 3B)

Theme: Attending a small college has several advantages for foreign students

Topic: attending a small college
Controlling ideas: has several advantages for foreign students

Major sentence(s):

1st Major Sentence: The tuition’s Cost will be cheaper

-          Minor sentence(s)
- The living expenses and any other outcome will be lower

-          - The chances for scholarship also bigger

-          - You can doing part-time jobs while studying

2nd Major sentence: It could be more comfortable

-          Minor Sentence(s)
- The numbers of students will be lower

-          - The professor will be more focus about teaching rather than doing research

-          - The students will be closer in emotional and physical point of view

-          - There will be chances where we can collaborate with the professors

-          - There will be no time wasted for useless events

3rd Major Sentence: It will be more flexible
Minor sentence(s)

-          - The system of the bureaucracy

-          - The schedule can be arranged

-          - The professor will be able to know its students closely

-           

The Concluding sentence:

So from my personal point of view, the foreign student will gain several advantages by attending a small college. Those advantages are the cost of the tuition that  will be cheaper, the condition of the environment  they will study on will be more comfortable and of course the situation of the study will be more relaxed, and the system and the materials of the campus will be easier to understand and more flexible so that there will be no problem with the lessons or the bureaucracy.

Referencess: 

 http://www.usnews.com/education/blogs/professors-guide/2010/07/28/10-reasons-to-go-to-a-small-college

Crowds of FBS’s Lobby

My campus is known as the Faculty of Language and Art or FBS for short, the FBS’s lobby is always full of activities which make it very crowded, it’s so crowded because of the students activities and the administrative business of the campus. Everyday, many students use the lobby as place to do their assignments and sometimes they disturb the other people there because of their noises and actions. They uses the Lobby’s Wi-Fi connections to find entertainments or to do their assignments, and it’s common to see the students playing games or watching movies, they also laughs and yells loudly to the extent that they disturb the other people nearby, many students formed groups while recharging their gadgets or when they doing their assignments but they pay no attention about their surroundings so the wires are everywhere and its really disturbing the public safety, students who doing their assignments prefer to sit on the floor because of limited number of seats available, its caused the uncomfortable feeling for the following students and the people surrounds them. Moreover, some people use the lobby as a spot to have snacks but then they throw away their rubbish randomly, many students just throw their rubbish or leaving many things behind so it makes the Dean, the lecturers and the staff angry. The FBS’s lobby has a limited number of seats so when there are so many people who doing their activities at the lobby, some people just sitting on the floor and it disturbs the other people who want to pass by. In short, the FBS’s Lobby is always crowded because there are so many activities take place there, it’s usually used by the students to do their assignments  and to do another various things, but because of our own actions the lobby turn into a messy place where rubbish scattered up over here and there. It makes us feel uncomfortable and makes the Dean, the lecturers and other staffs angry. As student we need to pay more respect and attention to our facility so we will not get any problem when we used it, we need to be more careful about our actions so that people will feel more comfortable when they entered the lobby.  After all, the FBS’s Lobby is ours, so it is our duty and responsibilities to take care of it.

Outline of FBS's Lobby

Topic sentence :
The FBS’s lobby is always full of activities which makes it very crowded

Major sentence(s) :

-          It’s so Crowded because of the students activities and the administrative business of the campus itself

Minor sentence(s)

-          - Many students use the Lobby as place to do their assignments and sometimes they disturb the other people on the spot

-          - They use the Lobby’s Wi-Fi connections  to find entertainments or to do their assignments 

-          - It’s common to see the students playing games or watching movies and  they also laughs and yells loudly to the extent that they disturb the other people
 - Many students formed groups while recharging their gadgets or when they doing their assignments but they pay no attention about their surroundings so the wires are everywhere

Major sentence
Students who doing their assignments prefer to sit on the floor because of limited number of seats available 

Minor sentence(s)

-          Some people use the lobby as a spot to have snacks and they don’t throw away their rubbish in the rubbish bin

-        

-          Many students just throw their rubbish or leaving many things behind so it makes the Dean, the lecturers and the staff angry

-          The FBS’s lobby has a limited number of seats so when there are so many people who doing their activities at the lobby, some people just sitting on the floor and it disturbs the other people who want to pass by.

Concluding sentence(s)

In short, the FBS’s Lobby is always crowded because there are so many activities take place there, it’s usually used by the students to do their assignments  and to do another various things, but because of our own actions the lobby turn into a messy place where rubbish scattered up over here and there. It makes us feel uncomfortable and makes the Dean, the lecturers and other staffs angry. We need to pay more respect to our facility so we will not get any problem when we used it, we need to be more careful about our actions so that people will feel more comfortable when they entered the lobby.  After all, the FBS’s Lobby is ours. So  it’s our duty and responsibilities to take care of it.

Presented by Class 3 B

Ni Wayan Widya Agustini (1212021035)
Putu Sri Ayu Padmi (1212021042)
Putu Adhi Wirayasa (1212021044)
Kadek Prajinggo Patrya (1212021052)
Kadek Edi Suryanata (1212021053)
Ni Nyoman Ayu Padmitri (1212021059)
I Gede Bhisma Griwanasta (1212021167)

Final Free Hugs Campaign

Let me gives you Free Hugs !!

There was a man who doing a campaign about free hugs which offer free hugs for anyone, that man was a man with brown medium hair and quite good-looking. He stood in the middle of the street while holding a sign about offering free hugs for the pedestrians. At first, some people tried to keep their distance from the man while the others were toying with him, they react as if he was a freak who tried to do a sexual harassment, but then an elderly woman asked the man to give her a hug. The man gladly accept and gave her a hug then  that was  the turning point of the campaign, some people started to ask the man to give them a hug. either they are women or men, they asked the man to give them hugs to ease themselves from uneasiness or sadness. The man asked people who participated to give their signature as symbol of their support for the campaign. In the middle of the campaign the police came and prohibited the free hugs campaign, they tried to stop the man and his colleagues, but then after hearing the explanation they allowed it, then the man and his colleagues stood up and explain the purpose of the event,  after  that they continued their free hugs campaign  and they got 10 thousand signatures.  In the end, they got 10 thousand signatures and many people performed the free hugs, even one of the police accept it when someone tried to give him a hug, the main point of the video from my point of view is about how people giving and accepting kindness from each others, how we unite and cast away the lonely feeling in our heart, togetherness and equality for the better society and future

Reviewing friend's article

Free Hugs for every one
Article by Edi Suryanata (3B)

In the video we can see a man who doing a campaign about share the happiness with hugs. he was walking in the downtown while holds sign " free hugs". The first when he wanted to show the action, a lot of people who just smile and move away when he greet, but him never give up. And then the situation was changed when an old women come to him and then him asked to get a hugs from him. the man gladly accept and gave her a hug. the situation was changed after that there are many people saw that and some people wanted get a hugs from the man too. every person who passes are always asked to hugged him like young man, women, old, and kids wanted to get a free hugs from the man.

Because a lot of people there and the campaign that conducted by the man was banned by the police. The man tried to explain what was the purpose of the event. After that, the police allowed him to continued his event. so many people to do the same and finally the man give a signature list to the people who wanted to get a free hug and supported this event. Every one who supported this event will give a signature and finally 10 thousand signature from people was reached. After that the police permit the man to continue his campaign and it's awesome when every people can share a hugs and happiness. This video have a lot of moral, this video can tell us how important respect and share a happiness.
(http://edysuryanata1.blogspot.com/2013/10/campaign-about-free-hugs.html)

Topic sentence of 1^st paragraph

(a man who doing a campaign about share the happiness with hugs)
I think it supposed to be a man who doing a campaign about sharing happiness by giving free hugs, we need to inform the reader about what is the article about

Major supporting sentence  
he was walking in the downtown while holds sign " free hugs"
Comment: I think there ts supposed to be “Holding” and not “Holds”

Minor Supporting sentence(s) (The first when he wanted to show the action, a lot of people who just smile and move away when he greet, but him never give up) I don’t think it’s an appropriate minor supporting sentence, so I suggest you to check and make a better one

Major supporting sentence 2 (the situation was changed when an old women come to him and then him asked to get a hugs from him)
I think the tense is mess up, It supposed to be “The situation was change when an elderly woman came to him and then asked to get a hug from him”

Minor supporting sentence(s)

(the man gladly accept and gave her a hug.)
Comment I think you write it in the correct way, good work man

(the situation was changed after that there are many people saw that and some people wanted get a hugs from the man too)
Comment: please don’t push yourself to write a long sentence, because I think this sentence can be divided into 2 sentences, you need to pay more attention about marks

(every person who passes are always asked to hugged him like young man, women, old, and kids wanted to get a free hugs from the man)
 Comment: I don’t really understand the tense here, isn’t supposed to be “Every people who passing there were asked for a hug from him” and the rest of the sentence ? I think you need to pay more attention on you tenses and grammatical order

Topic sentence in 2^nd Paragraph
Because a lot of people there and the campaign that conducted by the man was banned by the police
Comment: I think the structure of the sentence isn’t right, It supposed to be “because there are lots of people”
Major supporting sentence 1
The man tried to explain what was the purpose of the event. After that, the police allowed him to continued his event.
Comment: please carefully write your sentence, after “to” we can’t use “ed”
Minor Supporting sentence(s)
(….)
Comment: it seems that I can’t find the minor supporting ideas here, you need to add it to make the situation to be clearer
Major Supporting sentence 2
so many people to do the same and finally the man give a signature list to the people who wanted to get a free hug and supported this event.
Comment: check your grammar again, its not “To do” but “Do” or “Did”
Minor supporting sentence(s)
. Every one who supported this event will give a signature and finally 10 thousand signature from people was reached
Comment: good sentence but still have some incorrect here and there, I mean it “Supports” and “Achieved” not “Supported” and “reached”
After that the police permit the man to continue his campaign and it's awesome when every people can share a hugs and happiness

Concluding sentence (….)
sorry but I did find a sentence about what is the moral value or such, but you did not write it in the proper way, you need to do it in a better way so that people will get what is the point of your writing

Grammar > Please give extra attention about your grammar, lots of tenses were messed up and I think it’s bad for your writing, it would be nice if you correct them soon

Vocabulary > the words selection is not too bad, but please keep so that the vocabulary will support the grammar, phrase like “to hugged” or “to hugs” aren’t really appropriate here. So please try to do better in the next assignment

Mechanics > I think the structure of the text is good, the plot progressing well and we can get the point clearly, but I just wondering why you write about the police twice ? I mean, you already write that they allowed the campaign, and after several sentences you write again about they permitted the campaign.. weird for me, so please re-check your writing before you post it

it's so good to be able to write a review about our friend's writings, i seems we can compete and exercising to make our writing skills better

Review by Bhisma Griwanasta (3B)